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Grumpy Old Man. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:05 am
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
grumpy old man
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007. All rights reserved.
aye
he saw them all for what they were
parasites
mites that burrowed under his skin
they'd win
lose
or draw
he saw
'scrotes'
he would mutter
'fuckin' scrotes
i can't wait to die'
sweet soft whispers
an old flame floated through his mind
time was gone when he wished for death
on rare days he forgave temporarily
family life
plates clink
smiles crack
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 8:35 am
by Catherine Edmunds
APOLOGIES!!!!!!!
I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:
1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.
ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...
You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:31 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:APOLOGIES!!!!!!!
I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:
1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.
ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...
You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.
LMAO
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What do we do now?
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:48 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
I definitely don't want to change any of the poems I've written in this thread either Delph
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What if we called the thread something else and I edited your initial message to say that the poetry contained here are all variations on the; 'Fibonacci sequence' style? We could call them - wait for it;
Delph Ambient Poetry or The Edmunds' Technique
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Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 4:18 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
A further point on this. The other day I linked to a magnificent interview with Seamus Heaney by Jenny McCartney in the Telegraph. His closing words to her were;
Seamus Heaney wrote:
'Write whatever you like!'
You can read the full interview by clicking
here.
So. Everything is alright Delph. Innit
?
No?
Ok then. I've made the appropriate adjustments to them all now Catherine.
Hyperlink is to;Telegraph.co.uk
http://www.telegraph.co.uk/arts/main.jh ... heaney.xml
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 5:10 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
Absolutely
I've edited the original post in the thread to add the correct definition, but as I've made it clear that it IS an edit well after the original post, all the poems can stand as they are. 'Truncated fibs'? 'White lies'? Whatever.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 5:12 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
Sorted but even so, happy days
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