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Re: Campaign! By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 5:11 pm
by psikottix
Lugh wrote:campaign!
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.- child
sudan
starvation
we all turn away
who wants to accept that today?
men
iraq
war machines
endlessly churning
out fresh dead. like a spit turning
when
will we
awaken?
when will we see that
this can be changed? open your eyes
don't
remain
blind sided
stop running away
campaign! we can stop this today...
Excuse my language all those tha are offended by words....but that is fucking great, mate. I'm really moved by that.
Thank you for sharing!
Re: Campaign! By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 5:19 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
psikottix wrote:
Excuse my language all those tha are offended by words....but that is fucking great, mate. I'm really moved by that.
Thank you for sharing!
Cheers Psi
If it's suitable for any work you and your campaign colleagues are involved with, you're very welcome to use it...
Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 6:15 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
I'm with Psi. That's exceptional writing, Lugh. Quite apart from anything else, you've now convinced me that this form is worth exploring further if it can produce such moving and forceful words.
Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 6:33 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:I'm with Psi. That's exceptional writing, Lugh. Quite apart from anything else, you've now convinced me that this form is worth exploring further if it can produce such moving and forceful words.
Cheers Delph ...
I look forward to reading some by you my friend
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Christmas Stuffing. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006
Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 10:14 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
christmas stuffing - a food fibonacci
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2006. All Rights Reserved.
Literary guidance from Catherine Edmunds.
- soon
i'm
gonna
blow up, then -
pop, fart, fly around
like a fast, deflating balloon
see
i've
eaten
way too much
i need plink, plink fizz
belly aches at the slightest touch
yeah
i
really
should lie down
get off my feet. sleep
dream about losing a few pounds
but
nope
i won't
i will make tea
crunch a few biscuits, nibble cakes
whinge at repeats on the t.v.
Grumpy Old Man. By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:05 am
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
grumpy old man
By Louis P. Burns aka Lugh © 2007. All rights reserved.
aye
he saw them all for what they were
parasites
mites that burrowed under his skin
they'd win
lose
or draw
he saw
'scrotes'
he would mutter
'fuckin' scrotes
i can't wait to die'
sweet soft whispers
an old flame floated through his mind
time was gone when he wished for death
on rare days he forgave temporarily
family life
plates clink
smiles crack
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 8:35 am
by Catherine Edmunds
APOLOGIES!!!!!!!
I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:
1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.
ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...
You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:31 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
delph_ambi wrote:APOLOGIES!!!!!!!
I got the form wrong. And now you've just written a brilliant one, but it ain't a 'fib'. It's missing the first line. The sequence SHOULD be:
1, 1, 2, 3, 5, etc.
ie, 1+1=2, so you have to have the two ones at the start...
You've still written a bloody good poem, Lugh. And I'm going to have to go back and re-write all of mine. Dammit. Or not. No. Can't be arsed. Sorry.
LMAO
...
What do we do now?
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 2:48 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
I definitely don't want to change any of the poems I've written in this thread either Delph
...
What if we called the thread something else and I edited your initial message to say that the poetry contained here are all variations on the; 'Fibonacci sequence' style? We could call them - wait for it;
Delph Ambient Poetry or The Edmunds' Technique
...
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 4:18 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
A further point on this. The other day I linked to a magnificent interview with Seamus Heaney by Jenny McCartney in the Telegraph. His closing words to her were;
Seamus Heaney wrote:
'Write whatever you like!'
You can read the full interview by clicking
here.
So. Everything is alright Delph. Innit
?
No?
Ok then. I've made the appropriate adjustments to them all now Catherine.
Hyperlink is to;Telegraph.co.uk
http://www.telegraph.co.uk/arts/main.jh ... heaney.xml
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 5:10 pm
by Catherine Edmunds
Absolutely
I've edited the original post in the thread to add the correct definition, but as I've made it clear that it IS an edit well after the original post, all the poems can stand as they are. 'Truncated fibs'? 'White lies'? Whatever.
Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 5:12 pm
by Louis P. Burns aka Lugh
Sorted but even so, happy days
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